Yeah... sorry about that. I misunderstood what you were saying.
In that case, the only issue I have is the first transformation. Instead of "connection to capital" -> "connection to finance/consulting interviews", I would instead say "connection to capital" -> "connection to more lucrative jobs". Though perhaps my opinion is colored by the fact that the consulting and finance interviews were hugely cut in the last year, and so a lot of my classmates have gotten interviews/jobs in other sectors. And those jobs are still quite lucrative.
In that case, the only issue I have is the first transformation. Instead of "connection to capital" -> "connection to finance/consulting interviews", I would instead say "connection to capital" -> "connection to more lucrative jobs". Though perhaps my opinion is colored by the fact that the consulting and finance interviews were hugely cut in the last year, and so a lot of my classmates have gotten interviews/jobs in other sectors. And those jobs are still quite lucrative.