If you're talking to average people, yes, your way of wording it would be more efficient.
However in certain domains accuracy is key, so one tries to communicate with as much detail as possible. In order to achieve this without being hyper-verbose, one uses an established set of vocabulary, whose subtle and detailed meaning is well-understood and common in that industry. That may make it sound strange to outsiders, but minimizes the risk for misunderstandings and lack of clarity amongst peers.
So reading between the lines - the bracket holding the helium tank (inside the oxygen tank) broke, the helium tank ripped away from it's plumbing (pressure lines and valve(s)) and the high pressure gas contained in it escaped into the oxygen tank causing it to burst.
The SpaceX description is a little vague about the plumbing, I'd like to know more about that - is it an on off vale that opens and closes under command of the flight computer to maintain pressure, or is it a modulated valve that is controlled by a PID loop or the like.
If you're talking to average people, yes, your way of wording it would be more efficient.
However in certain domains accuracy is key, so one tries to communicate with as much detail as possible. In order to achieve this without being hyper-verbose, one uses an established set of vocabulary, whose subtle and detailed meaning is well-understood and common in that industry. That may make it sound strange to outsiders, but minimizes the risk for misunderstandings and lack of clarity amongst peers.