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At the point where you "will work with the favourited games", presumably for some take.

Further, regardless of how much you assure anyone, you've not even shown so much as a hint of an ui design. I have no idea what "everything i need to efficiently collaborate" is, and you are not doing a great job convincing me you know.

Lastly, your vocabulary, your writing style, and your phrasing all sound like a buzzword-worshipping middle manager trying hard to make a sale. It is hard for me to overstate just how untrustworthy that makes you sound.

Just to not leave you confused, here are the parts that make you sound as if you're trying very hard to pretend that you know what you're doing in order to pull a sale:

    "our platform"
    "a part of"
    "I can assure"
    "once it's ready"
    "everything you need to efficiently collaborate"
    "the crowd"
If you wish to be trusted, speak in simple and humble terms.


Hey, love the feedback. Any chance you could flick me your email to mark@gamestarter.io

I want to get future phasing right, dodge buzzwords and drive simplified messages.

Would love if I could run future messaging past you.

Feedback like this is why I posted on HackerNews


Why not, mail sent.




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