Is it too busy?
Does it convey a clear message?
Does it make you want to try it out?
Take a look at this infographic for some tips: http://blog.kissmetrics.com/landing-page-design-infographic/...
And maybe look at some of the landing pages featured on this blog post: http://unbounce.com/landing-page-examples/built-using-unboun...
- Changing the font from (what I think is) Arial bold to pretty much anything else. A lot of nice web fonts out there nowadays.
- Using simpler visual codes for text: every letter of 'APPs' doesn't have to be a different color and bigger font sized. The MSN messenger icon right in the middle of text is another example of complicated visual code - you could mention in a more appropriate place with text only.
- Decreasing the amount of text and try to explain 'why' I need this.
- It fits my screen, but it could be large for others. Having a vertical layout where you have the text at the top and screenshot(s) at the bottom might free up the cluttered feeling.
- The vertical setup will help with the currently 'floating in space' feeling of some elements, like Supported browsers. I know they are aligned, but they feel isolated and floating.
- A couple of more screenshots of what 'this is' with their relevant explanations. I wanted to see more to understand more.
- More streamlined buttons for Try It, Login and "I want Appynote..." Login and Try it should be the main buttons here, but with its size, "I want Appynote..." steals all the attention.
I hope these help.
My problem is that I am trying to appeal to both individual users and people who may want the software for an organization-wide deployment.
I know there are a lot cool fonts out there especially the Google fonts, but I am not really a designer, I do have my own taste which probably isn't the same for most people.
I choose the Arial font because I saw it used on Fogcreek software's page. Maybe I should hire a designer:)
Anyway I really appreciate the feedback and would definitely incorporate it into further improvements.
The bullet point text is almost the same size as your header text. That can be scaled down. A different font might also help the flow of the page more.
The gradient on the words APPS and NOTES doesn't really work.
I would try to include a higher res screen shot too as I was getting closer to the screen to see what it was you were showing me.
Also the Y and N in the logo being grey on the patterned background make it a bit hard to read. I'd say the name needs to be very distinct and clear.
I was a bit reluctant to hit the Try It button as I wasn't sure of the benefits of the app and I didn't know if it was paid, free etc.
I probably would have clicked through to a page showing more screenshots. A demo video would probably get people trying it too!
Hope that helps!
I couldn't tell if the "It's like all of your sentences are vying for my attention simultaneously" is a good or bad thing:)
Do you mean it was hard to follow from one sentence to the next? Or was the bulleted list effective in grabbing your attention?
I really appreciate these feedbacks guys:)
Like 5 people talking to you at once, each saying I'm important - listen to me! :D
You need to guide the user through the flow of information and font size plays a big part in that.
Be warned, I have a highly idiosyncratic point of view that lots of people don't agree with.
It tells me what it does, it doesn't tell me what problem it solves. I don't want to try to map your features to my problems, I want to see that you know what problems are, and that your app fixes them.
It also doesn't fit on my screen.
About solving problems: I thought the tag line saying your APPs and your notes together, conveys the fact that students want a single point of access for all their work, both content and APPs.
> I thought the tag line saying your APPs and your notes
> together, conveys the fact that students want a single
> point of access for all their work, ...
It's a point of view - you could consider it, then ignore it.
Or you could say:
"With notes and APPs spread everywhere, APPynote
can provide a single port of call to get them
New & Improved: http://www.appynote.com