Too much off-message content right up front. "Freedom from coffee and copies" and "new and improved" are the two messages you hit me with on first impression, which loses me. Your message seems to be, "YouIntern.com brings students and employers together." That's what needs to be in 1000 point font. You should follow up with your main point of differentiation, i.e. "by crawling 8 bazillion thingers and having a team of monkeys sort them to match your skills".
Thinking about this one further -- I might change it to be more targeted at employers. I think they're the harder group to get on board, and if you get them, and the right ones, then the students will follow.
Maybe something like, "Great minds, at a special, introductory price." ;-)
http://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=342705
Too much off-message content right up front. "Freedom from coffee and copies" and "new and improved" are the two messages you hit me with on first impression, which loses me. Your message seems to be, "YouIntern.com brings students and employers together." That's what needs to be in 1000 point font. You should follow up with your main point of differentiation, i.e. "by crawling 8 bazillion thingers and having a team of monkeys sort them to match your skills".