I don't play golf, so I don't know if this is useful to a golfer, but I assume so =) It looks cool anyway.
1. tghgolfdesigns.com - not memorable.
2. Pocket Pro - does not tell me anything about the app (yes, I get Golf Pro buts it not instantly recognisable). Pocketgolfswing.com is available... buy that and create a product site.
3. I don't even see the product in action until nearly 2 minutes in. Most of the stuff before is just dull. People who buy the product don't care about your circuit board.
4. Use simpler language - you talk up your data frequency by talking about 60 frames per second on a video capture system and yours of 1000 times per second. Say "over 10x more accuracy" or whatever.
5. Guy on our left - we can tell you keep looking down to read your script and it looks awkward.
6. Get along to a golf club and find the club pro and persuade him to be involved. It will give it a bit more gravitas.
7. Perhaps consider adding some titles. Eg whilst the swing data is downloading to your iPhone, put on a screen title of "Data transfers is under 5 seconds". It provides a little distraction of something for someone to read and the 'wait' doesn't feel as long. You could also use a title to show each view that your app offers. eg "1. Swing view, 2. shot view" etc. Because it's a tiny phone being demonstrated, it's not clear to see the UI and the title could reinforce what the user is looking at.
Your website
1. In little text you finally explain what the product is. You waste 5 lines and 300px of height mentioning your company name and the product title and it still doesn't say what it does. Have a tagline - "introducing pocket pro - analyse your golf swing instantly" etc.
2. E-mail sign up for release. Put this at the top, in the centre. Otherwise people will see that it's not released yet, forget about it and never return. E-mail means you can get them back again!
Looks a cool product though and nice visualisations. Wishing you every success
Thanks for taking a look. You have provided some excellent feedback on both our product and the website. We have been focusing the bulk of our efforts on the actual device over the last 10 months and have had little time for website revisions and promotion. As development approaches completion we are now starting to spend some time on product identity. Your suggestions are a great start for this. Thanks.
With the help from a large USA golf accessory manufacturer- we hope to see the product hit shelves in 2011.
1. tghgolfdesigns.com - not memorable.
2. Pocket Pro - does not tell me anything about the app (yes, I get Golf Pro buts it not instantly recognisable). Pocketgolfswing.com is available... buy that and create a product site.
3. I don't even see the product in action until nearly 2 minutes in. Most of the stuff before is just dull. People who buy the product don't care about your circuit board.
4. Use simpler language - you talk up your data frequency by talking about 60 frames per second on a video capture system and yours of 1000 times per second. Say "over 10x more accuracy" or whatever.
5. Guy on our left - we can tell you keep looking down to read your script and it looks awkward.
6. Get along to a golf club and find the club pro and persuade him to be involved. It will give it a bit more gravitas.
7. Perhaps consider adding some titles. Eg whilst the swing data is downloading to your iPhone, put on a screen title of "Data transfers is under 5 seconds". It provides a little distraction of something for someone to read and the 'wait' doesn't feel as long. You could also use a title to show each view that your app offers. eg "1. Swing view, 2. shot view" etc. Because it's a tiny phone being demonstrated, it's not clear to see the UI and the title could reinforce what the user is looking at.
Your website
1. In little text you finally explain what the product is. You waste 5 lines and 300px of height mentioning your company name and the product title and it still doesn't say what it does. Have a tagline - "introducing pocket pro - analyse your golf swing instantly" etc.
2. E-mail sign up for release. Put this at the top, in the centre. Otherwise people will see that it's not released yet, forget about it and never return. E-mail means you can get them back again!
Looks a cool product though and nice visualisations. Wishing you every success