anyone with this link can read and comment. thanks!
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Plus, I don't know that it's a huge element of a story (I can't tell if "of the story" means your story specifically or all stories). The culture shapes language, and the culture shapes the story. The language's influence on the story isn't anywhere near the culture's.
ya gotta use lines breaks smartly and break your sentences well though or it can be confusing.
Being a fan of both Adams and Stephenson I want to read this when I get an opportunity, did you write it during NaNoWriMo by any chance?
If you're going to ask a bunch of people edit your work for free, then they have the right to criticize however they please. I'd love to read it but putting up with the capitalization is more of an annoyance than reading it is worth.
a friend finished last night, saying it was a "rough gem." high praise; i'm much more inspired to finish.
my goal is, among other things, to get some concepts in computer science into the mainstream thought. to me, p vs np is the most fascinating question ever asked.
Also, if you ever plan on sending something to an editor, standard manuscript format: http://www.cs.cmu.edu/~mslee/format.html