>I have to agree. It didn't really turn out as well as I wanted. The talk is really good, but I could never make this read smoothly.
Props for stepping forward and saying this :-)
I think it has to do with that you're trying to capture the content of a talk largely by presenting the bullet points from that talk's slide deck, but in doing so miss a lot of context that came from the presentation.
Your summary at the bottom is great -- I think it should be the whole article. This would offer viewers a snapshot of what they can expect out of the video so that they don't miss anything (for example, a very common takeaway I'm seeing from this and from people I show it to is that this is "just" a network stack hack -- no mention of his proposal for multi-core optimization, etc).