* "I'm given you" -> "I've given you", "I'm given", "I'm giving you", or "I'm givin' you"
* It's not clear what the field after "from" is supposed to be
* "your email is [ ] with a password of [ ]" -- what do you want my email password for? Try "your email is [ ] and your password is [ ]".
I've been reading Don't Make Me Think and Rocket Science Made Easy, both by Steve Krug. Good stuff if you want to catch issues like these. Just a small amount of usability testing ("a morning a month") can bring significant benefits.